Posted February 19, 2011 The fur is love. I think it's looking great. No way would I be able to do something like that. I would most definitely die. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 19, 2011 Well trying my first sprite lines, and yeah, this is as far as I've got and I'm not sure how to go on, especially with regards to the feathers: So your advice would be much appreciated Share this post Link to post
Posted February 19, 2011 :3 Thanks tiki, saph. Prince - For the feathers, I suggest looking at the wing picture in my OP. Currently the most obvious problem is that they're rather fat. LadyLyzar also is a great artist to reference - go to the Completed List and look for feathered dragons she's worked on. That's what I did to get the feathers for my cassowary dragon right. The pose of the dragon is a bit odd and rather un-dragon-like, especially with the splayed arms. The tail has a number of flat lines that need to be smoothed/curved, and the hind legs look a wee bit fat. I'll stop with that for now. Puppy - You'll want to check your anatomy and your lines. Spritelines should only be one pixel thick. The forelegs are too fat and low on the chest, the body is rather skinny (for a dragon like this), the head's a bit large, the hind legs lack proper anatomy as do the wings, and of course it's been cut off. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 19, 2011 Thanks a lot, Rhea. It was my first sprite ever and not done in a very well program I guess it won't be a problem if I start again in Paint or Photoshop. I think I do that tomorrow Share this post Link to post
Posted February 19, 2011 (edited) I hope your eyes don't burn at the sight of the wings on this spriteline. Edit: Edited February 20, 2011 by wonton55912 Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Hm... is this meant to be a dragon, or a winged seal? Either way, the pose is very... bland. It's not flying, or sitting, or doing anything, it's just... a neutral, boring pose, hovering in midair. We could fix up all the technical bits but still not have a good sprite. D'ya still want crits, though? Also, IT'S DONE AT LAST. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Oh that looks fabulous Rhea! You should definitely put that in your sig. Oh and.... I hate hatchies... It looks horrible... DX Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 (edited) Hm. Looks like you're using the original design... the wing needs more wing fingers, to match the adults. You seem to have a thing for tails going every which way, and while it currently isn't in an impossible position, it does look a bit odd. My main concern is that it looks rather similar in posture to the adults - try something different? Maybe have it laying down, or pouncing? &ty<3 I did put it into the rotation of one of my images so you should see it pop up periodically. I might change that though... Edited February 20, 2011 by RheaZen Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Yeah I was going to say it looks like a mini adult rather than a hatchling. I'm just not so good at poses so I'm not sure what to do with them. But I can try something else. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Try experimenting with sketches first rather than spriting from scratch - it's easier to erase and redraw, retrace, etc. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 It's supposed to be sitting. Did I make it too much like a seal? Yes, I still want crit. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 (edited) Tried a new one. I hate Paint >> can anyone tell me how to make a pixel (like in paint) image in Photoshop Elements 8? Edited February 20, 2011 by Puppylikestosti Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 wonton - Alright then, I'll just cover the technical bits in that case. Yes, it looks very much like a seal. The whiskers look very odd, as if they're plastered onto the face. The wing membrane should connect more on the sides of the body rather than at the dorsum, the flipper's connection to the body is too thin (it looks like it's about to fall off) and the tail is bent at an awkward angle that does not suggest that it's sitting. This is stylized but gives an idea of what you could do. Puppy - Wing Anatomy. Check my OP for some references. Your wings need an extra section/joint. You've still got some doubly-thick lines on the sprite. The tail/body/neck overall have some thick-thin issues, and the head is turned in such a way that the neck may or may not be broken. It's a good attempt at an active pose, but you might want to try something simpler first so that you can get the basics down before moving on. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Thanks again Rhea. I normally don't have such problems with wings. http://wolffangamer.deviantart.com/gallery/24604866#/d34t2gr http://wolffangamer.deviantart.com/gallery/24604866#/d33b8oi (blech this is old) But with spriting I seem to have more trouble :S Mostly because I can't really sketch properly. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Yeah, it takes some time getting used to spriting and translating your skill in other mediums to it. It's all "Hey this line looks wrong, let's move it and then now I have to smooth it out and then it still looks wrong let's try this again argh wtf". ... Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Is this better? Don't know what to do with the whiskers. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 I'd get rid of them in that case. I don't really know what you want me to do. Technically, it's all right - there aren't any double-lines or stairsteps or such. Non-technically, the pose is extremely awkward. No matter what you do technically, it won't make the sprite any better. It might be easiest to start from scratch. Do you sketch much? Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 No, I don't. Should I just try to make it look more like it's sitting? Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Yes. I did include a picture up above in a previous post for reference. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 (edited) Maybe it could just be about to take off from the sitting position? I can't do that without straight lines. Tried removing the whiskers, looked too weird. Edited February 20, 2011 by wonton55912 Share this post Link to post
Posted February 20, 2011 Well, if it's about to take off the wings would be in a different position. Sketching is a good way of learning how to posture/position things without all the hassle that spriting entails. Share this post Link to post
Posted February 21, 2011 Let's just say I can't sketch. Tried shading even though the pose is weird. Fail Share this post Link to post
Posted February 21, 2011 You'll want to increase your contrast so you can see what you're doing. Also, where is the lightsource? It seems inconsistent. Share this post Link to post
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