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However, when winter begins to wane, these normally grouchy dragons undergo a massive personality shift and become excessively chipper and incredibly social with the solitary focus of pairing up themselves—and other—dragons.

 

I think the em dashes (?) don't make sense like this.

 

 

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Their lusciously soft feathers and paper-thin golden spires are by no means the armor of a warrior, but an Erador Lindwyrm is a force to be reckoned with.



This may be grammatically correct, but I find it super-confusing to start a description with the word "They."

The first sentence would be better if it was something like:

Erador Lindwyrms' lusciously soft feathers and paper-thin golden spires are by no means the armor of a warrior, but they can be a force to be reckoned with.

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1 hour ago, Kakaru_of_DOOM said:



This may be grammatically correct, but I find it super-confusing to start a description with the word "They."

The first sentence would be better if it was something like:

 

I actually like it like this, something a little different.

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