One Day I Will Be a Famous ______

[nicknick88]

So, I know like me, many of us have big aspirations. For instance, I want to be a screen play writer. Some of you might want to be authors, playwrights, ...etc.

This thread is for people to have others critique a Character, or idea they may have. I have written a novel To Be Published in 2013, so I can critique well.

[piggygirl859]

Cool for your book! Whats it called? Cause I have dreams of being an Auther also. Oh dreams! Hopefully they will come true!

Edited September 7, 2012 by piggygirl859

[nicknick88]

It's not officially going to b e published, lol, I let that off the wrong way, I mean a publishing comapny, (Disney Hyperion,) said there is about a 75% chance they will, if they do, it's called Red Heaven.

[RWyvern]

I have ridiculously big aspirations to have the book I'm writing made into a movie 8D/shot

 

Seriously though, that's why I'm working so hard. I hope to have it published, and I'll illustrate it. I wrote a paragraph to test my writing ability and it's gained so many positive reactions it's going in the actual story :3

[pinkieseb]

It's not officially going to b e published, lol, I let that off the wrong way, I mean a publishing comapny, (Disney Hyperion,) said there is about a 75% chance they will, if they do, it's called Red Heaven.

Omg, really? Congratz, i heard its extreamly hard to get a book published....

 

If it does get published, i'll find it somewhere

[RWyvern]

I have ridiculously big aspirations to have the book I'm writing made into a movie 8D/shot

 

Seriously though, that's why I'm working so hard. I hope to have it published, and I'll illustrate it. I wrote a paragraph to test my writing ability and it's gained so many positive reactions it's going in the actual story :3

 

Very basic idea + the fact it is still under construction: An army of a thousand + dragons take over the desert capital of Ramuda, capturing or killing most residents. From the capital the enemy has much more control over the continent and branch out to take out the rest. In the initial takeover three dragons manage to escape and meet up with a small clan, who are fighting to stop the enemy before he gains too much power. The End.

 

It's extremely cliche'd, I know. But with the fact I want to write a war story makes it hard because it's a formula that's been overworked to the death. So I can really only try my hardest to hide the cliche'iness as much as possible x3

[Cori]

i heard its extreamly hard to get a book published....

Lately it only seems hard for good books to be published...terrible ones seem the slip right through the system. *coughFiftyShadesofGray*

 

But I digress.

 

I'm working on a book of sorts with two friends. We've done a lot for it so far, but there are a lot of gaps that need to be fleshed out and developed, but we're having fun with it. It's a war story too, but the main plot happens before the war actually starts, and the main characters are trying to rally the leaders of separate countries to prevent the war and to figure out why the 'antagonist' country is trying to go to war in the first place.

[satyr76]

I'm hoping to become an author one day. I don't know if I could write a novel, so maybe just an anthology of shortmstories? I don't know. |D I have a short story I'm hoping to get published once I polish it up.

[RWyvern]

I'm working on a book of sorts with two friends. We've done a lot for it so far, but there are a lot of gaps that need to be fleshed out and developed, but we're having fun with it.

Lucky you have help there. My family isn't very cooperative when it comes to thinking of new ideas and it all come down to me. It's really slow going, often taking a week or more before I come up with a way around a plot hole or something of the like >.<

 

This is my test paragraph.

Takhorr growled deeply. The cave was pitch black, with the only light source being the few dim torches dotted around the place. He pushed a dagger out of the way and lowered his head. 'Leader, I have arrived.'

 Something stirred in the shadows and a glint of steel caught the torchlight for a moment. A large dragon emerged partially out of the darkness, a dragon with a fringe of hefty horns and a worn helmet of steel. His eyes, glowing slightly red and bloodshot from lack of light looked directly at his visitor. 'What news do you bring, Takhorr?'

 Takhorr raised his head, looking directly at the concealed dragon. 'Our troops have fully gathered. We have a force of an estimated thousand out there. We're ready.'

 A cruel smirk drew across the hidden dragon's lips, showing an array of yellowed teeth. 'Tomorrow early morning. We target Ramuda. Slaughter all the dragons living there. With the capital overtaken, we can branch out and work on capturing the rest of ____.' He shifted to the side and the light moved across his face, revealing a large scar directly across his right eye. He slowly drew a talon across the stone floor, leaving a deep gouge and chuckled softly. 'They won't know what hit them.'

 

The ____ is where an unconfirmed continent name should be.

[nicknick88]

That is great, but it lacks some voice.

[RWyvern]

Umm, okay? How exactly? That's the best I can write, so just how do I need to adjust it?

[piggygirl859]

Lucky you have help there. My family isn't very cooperative when it comes to thinking of new ideas and it all come down to me. It's really slow going, often taking a week or more before I come up with a way around a plot hole or something of the like >.<

 

This is my test paragraph.

Takhorr growled deeply. The cave was pitch black, with the only light source being the few dim torches dotted around the place. He pushed a dagger out of the way and lowered his head. 'Leader, I have arrived.'

 Something stirred in the shadows and a glint of steel caught the torchlight for a moment. A large dragon emerged partially out of the darkness, a dragon with a fringe of hefty horns and a worn helmet of steel. His eyes, glowing slightly red and bloodshot from lack of light looked directly at his visitor. 'What news do you bring, Takhorr?'

 Takhorr raised his head, looking directly at the concealed dragon. 'Our troops have fully gathered. We have a force of an estimated thousand out there. We're ready.'

 A cruel smirk drew across the hidden dragon's lips, showing an array of yellowed teeth. 'Tomorrow early morning. We target Ramuda. Slaughter all the dragons living there. With the capital overtaken, we can branch out and work on capturing the rest of ____.' He shifted to the side and the light moved across his face, revealing a large scar directly across his right eye. He slowly drew a talon across the stone floor, leaving a deep gouge and chuckled softly. 'They won't know what hit them.'

 

The ____ is where an unconfirmed continent name should be.

Well I liked it I don't think it lacked of voice.

[Wantdew]

I'm inventing a language. Not a lame 4th grade language like a REAL one.

I'm currently on the pronunciation stage.

[RWyvern]

I'm inventing a language. Not a lame 4th grade language like a REAL one.

I'm currently on the pronunciation stage.

OwO I'm making a language too, for my story. It's not easy |D All the names I've done are made up, each one with it's phonetics and stuff. I won't focus on the language seriously until I've finished writing, then I can adjust the story to work with it.

[Wantdew]

My real name is pronounced DEMO in mine.

 

Plenty of book ideas just poped into my head just now

[gjhhhhhh]

I'm working on several stories that I hope one day will make it to some publishing list. But of course, dreams don't always come true D: So yeah. I still want them to get published sometime in the future cause they're pretty good although I havent really been working on them for a while

[Skystorm]

I really want to be a writer, but for now I'll have to practice. I was thinking about being an artist but I'm not going to get famous like Leonardo da' Vinci :/

[nicknick88]

This thread is actually uite nice, and I mean it lacked voic as in, I didn't feel anything when I read it, but maybe that's just me.

[Ashywolf]

I wrote a 100k word story a year ago. Who wants to critique it ?

 

 

I feel like writing a 3rd person story. I've always really done 1st person ones. I like them more cause you can explore the character's mind better.

[PhoenixStarr]

I wrote a 100k word story a year ago. Who wants to critique it ?

 

 

I feel like writing a 3rd person story. I've always really done 1st person ones. I like them more cause you can explore the character's mind better.

I can, if you want to send it round my way. (PM me for my email. I've had stuff published, so I can help)

 

And in response to what someone said about the fact that Good books aren't published, it's because bad and clichè sell. It's hard to get a publisher to accept what may be a masterpiece, no matter how revolutionary, original, or well-written the story is, because they don't know if it will sell. You have to find middle ground. (Voice of experience here)

 

 

@rampaging Wyvern

What he means by "it's lacking voice" is the tone is apathetic and detached, and it sounds like everything else. No real figurative language, just detached description and (apologies!!) excessively clichè dialogue.

Edited September 10, 2012 by PhoenixStarr

[Saruwatari]

It's not officially going to b e published, lol, I let that off the wrong way, I mean a publishing comapny, (Disney Hyperion,) said there is about a 75% chance they will, if they do, it's called Red Heaven.

congrats in advance <3

if I ever get myself to propely translate my own book to be we should definetly chat about it a bit :3

[nicknick88]

I'm actually thinking about writing a self-help book. Lately, I have been meditating, and my view on the world is changing. If I ever were to it would be called Problem?

[beacker1160]

I have dreams of becoming an author too and I am writing a book with 2 friends (has 80 pages so far, we aim for 300) and I hope to get it published.

 

I can critique other writings, as I am also a fanfiction writer (Minecraft, Pokemon, Dragcave, and the like) so I cover a diverse area

 

I hope you guys out there can also become successful writers...it's all about preservance, creativity, and if you get knocked down, get back up and keep trying! I know I probably sound ridiculous (yeah right, a kid trying to get rich and famous through books) but I will preservere and continue my dream :3