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//impatience bluuuuuh

Sorry, but little random things like this make me laugh out loud. And I am in a library.

 

bluuuuuuh. What the heck?

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The sound effect "bluh" is a running gag in Homestuck. "Bleh" just sounds so bland after seeing "bluh". I can't stop using it now.

 

The word "incredibly" has also been permanently added to my list-of-words-I-actually-use. Homestuuuuuuuck.

 

Really though, maybe we should start.

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I'm not one to normally double post, (Actually, one of my other forums has it as a 2-day ban!) but I asked a handful of my friends over in the Dragon RP's to join via PM. We may be able to get a couple more people out of it (I am afraid they will be mostly girls, though.)

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Username: Chasilin

Character name: Evelynn-Marie Roy de Rives ((Marie))

Gender: Female

Looks: She's not spectacularly beautiful or very hard on the eyes, she's very naturally pretty in her own way. She's got a heart shaped face frammed with cherrybrown hair cut back and flipped out until her shoulders where it falls straight and unlayered until her lower back. She has forest green eyes that are encircled in a blue-green ring of solid color. Marie is about 5'5" and has very long limbs, she's very skinny but her curves aren't lacking by much despite that. She believes she's very much average in everything, appearance wise. She generally wears a soft brown sundress that comes off one shoulder and dips beneath the other, she wears leggings that are striped in an alteration between black and green and she wears brown boots that hike up her calves to just beneath her knee. On her arms she has brown cloth gloves that go up to just beneath her shoulder, there are no finger holes apart for the thumbs. She wears a golden necklace that had an emerald on the end encompassed by bronze vines which loop over the chain. Her earings are simple emerald studs and she's got a matching ring on her right index finger. These articles of jewelry belonged to Elizah, who had gotten them passed down from generations of her family because her ancestor was a child born by an affair with a King thus the name 'Roy', and so the jewels were passed on to Marie; she never takes them off.

Power: The ability to influence and understand animals. She can understand what animals are saying and they in turn can understand her. She's great with communicating with them and they are naturally attracted to her. She doesn't actually influence them, as mentioned, but everything about her draws them to her and they'd willingly obey her, wild or not.

Likes: Animals, being immersed in nature, reading books about animals or basically anything she takes an interest to. She enjoys learning new ways to heal and tend to animals and ways to make them happy. She loves to wear brown, earthy colors or colors that are inconspicuous like tans and blacks.

Dislikes: Arrogance, impatience (though she can be herself sometimes) hypocracy, animal abuse, nature abuse, animal extinction or the over abuse of food production. She also doesn't like ebing the center of attention or being touched by anything but animals and plants.

Personality: She's quiet and to herself though she's got some unexpectedly strong points. She's unafraid to stand up for something she feels strongly for and she's honest to a fauly; it gets her in trouble quite often. Sh'e especially shy around people her own age but she can handle children and adults far better. She is terrible at taking the intiative and has to be asked/told/invited to do something before she does it. Otherwize she'll keep her personal wants to herself. She's not selfish openly but she has selfish thoughts, when she does, she mental beats herself for it. She does this whenever she thinks anything that's negative. Since she dosn't like to think about things and prefers to live in the moment than think about the past or the future she's often caught staring at nothing, lost in an empty void of absorbing what's around her. She could stay like this for hours and not a single thought will cross her mind. She prefers quiet places to loud noisey ones, she's claustrophobic but is good at working through crowds efficiently. She's a hard worker and a likes to keep things neat for a while before giving up and letting things be as they may. She's extremely contradictive.

Past Life: She lived on a large farm surrounded by livestock who loved a good conversation during chore time. She was always eager to help on the farm and the lovely elderly couple who took care of her doted on her. They were a happy family but once Elizah passed away, Rodger was never the same...he soon passed away but not befor naming her heir to his livings and sending her off to the school to learn to be a princess. She'd always been their princess and Elizah had dreamed of being able to send Marie there, but she passed away before then. Now, the ranch is manned by temp workers who live in it and keep it tended while she is away.

Other:Dove Pins Are Epic.

 

((Is this okay?))

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reading books about mythology, animals, manga's,

This takes place in Mideavel times. I don't think that Mangas nor Mythology was there back then.

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Also the Dove children can't read yet. They're going to learn how to in the school. I asked Peach in a PM.

 

How'd her parents afford all that jewelry and fancy clothing if they live on a small farm in a village?

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Yes, I agree with everyone else here. If it wasn't "back in the old days" and she lived in a different location, that character would be fine. But since we are in "the old days" you're going to have to change some things. And two things I'm confused about.

 

Things to be changed:

Everyone lives in a small village. How can she have jewelry? And I don't think leggings were in "the old days". If there were leggings, I don't think they would be black and green.

 

No one can read in the village. So how could she read? If you are saying when she learns how to read, then that would be reasonable. But, reading about animals is probably the only thing that would be reasonable in this time.

 

Who is Elizah and Rodger? Are they the elderly couple? Two cousins? Two siblings? Two friends?

 

About the animal and Nature abuse. 1. Aren't animals in Nature? So wouldn't she just hate Nature abuse? 2. Since they live in a village, wouldn't they have to kill the animals for food and cut down trees for building and firewood? Unless, you mean she doesn't like to look at it.

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Have some more critique. I'm sorry for being a Grammar Nazi.

 

Dove children plot

 

Now, 12 years after you were found,

her curves aren't lacking by much

Wut

 

She's not spectacularlly beautiful or very hard on the eyes, she's very naturally pretty in her own way.

"Spectacularly" is spelled wrong. Also, do you mean that she's not conventionally beautiful? Because what you're saying here is "She's not pretty, but she's pretty". She seems pretty beautiful in the normal sense from your description, though.

 

"Cherry brown" is two words.

 

She's very much average in everything, appearance wise.

But you just spent several sentences saying how she looked unusual/pretty. What?

 

manga's

An apostrophe followed by an S either shows possession(Harry's car) or is a contraction for "is"(it's a tree/it is a tree). It is not a plural form under any circumstances. Also, since manga is a category, there shouldn't be an S at all. It's like saying "science fictions".

 

Personality: [...]she's honest to a fault; it gets her in trouble quite often. She's especially [...] She is terrible at taking initiative and has to be asked/told/invited to do something before she does it. Otherwise she'll keep her personal wants to herself. [...] Since she doesn't like to [...] She prefers quiet places to loud noisy ones[...] She's extremely contradictive.

Firefox spell check informs me that "contradictive" isn't a word. What do you mean by it?

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Never mind. It's mostly the curves thing.

Also I'm two years older and several centimeters shorter than you. This makes me angry.

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Never mind. It's mostly the curves thing.

Also I'm two years older and several centimeters shorter than you. This makes me angry.

Shortie Well, I'm very tall for my age, so that would explain it.

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I want SOMEBODY to join it, and if it's all the way back down on the second page, nobody will see it, anyways.

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True, also, I edited my form. I explained how she got the jewelry and I already explained who Elizah and Rodger were, the elderly couple who had taken her in.

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I think it's good for approval! ((Yayz!)) Accepted! Now we can start. *rubs hands* Someone else can have the honors of first post. :3

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((-thinks- I have an idea for a post.))

 

-A yawn escaped a young girl as she stands before the entrance of the school she's been sent to; on the final wishes of her deceased caretakers. Looking at it, politely clutching a small bag of her belongings in front of her with both hands, she casts a large sweeping gaze along the school's grounds. Other children are accumulating in the doorway as the morning passes on. Taking her first step onto the stone stairs that lead up to the entrance, the girl braces herself for her new life and what it might bring.- A princess, she thought, imagining fairtales and the beautiful girls with their gowns, escorted by princes and living happily ever after. Poppycock... Sighing to her foolishness on the matter, she came to the top of the staircase and walked inside where she saw more students. Too shy to walk up and greet anyof them, the girl continued on to find a woman, dressed in a maid's garb and busily cleaning.

 

Upon discovering this maid and approaching her, she curtsied- "Excuse me, my name is Evelynn-Marie Roy de Rives but please, do call me Marie. I am enrolling here in this school. I'd like to ask for your help." -Marie turned her expectant gaze on the woman in front of her, she had appeared friendly and this is why she'd chosen to go to her.-

 

((I hope this is alright?))

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(( I never considered starting... Humph. ))

Robby walked himself to school. It wasn't too far of a trip. Baggage of clothes and assorted personal belongings in hand, he trotted up the stairs and through the doorway.

The indoors was grand; he had never been in the castle before. Somewhat lost, he panned around to see a smallish cleaning lady. He proceeded to her, in an effort to ask her what was going on, exactly, but it was clear she was already engaged in conversation with a girl about his height. He waited patiently next to them, hoping he would not be noticed and would blend into the small crowd of people.

 

(( Maybe we should come up with a schedule for this. It will be chaotic, otherwise. Who goes where for what, and when? ))

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((Chasilin - I don't think any of those dashes were necessary. The phrasing in the second paragraph was kind of awkward. Maybe put "She seemed friendly, so Marie approached her" in front of the dialogue? I don't think it makes much sense to put the reason for an action after that action. //Grammar Nazi

Hey, am I allowed to go Grammar Nazi on people's posts?))

 

Ianthe hugged her bag to her chest and looked up at the castle. She fiddled with her pin nervously, feeling the engraved letters on the back. She had put it on today for the first time in years because it seemed to fit a fancy place like the royal castle, but that idea just felt silly now. She took a last look back in the direction of the village. This was it. Unless she failed, she would never be going back there. Leaving home forever to go on an adventure and become a princess. It almost felt like a fairy tale. Ianthe smiled faintly at the thought.

 

Well, no sense in dawdling, then. Ianthe walked up to the stone stairs and into the castle, stopping briefly to admire the huge castle doors. She felt lost. She had thought there'd be a sign, or something, to tell the new arrivals what to do. There was nothing. Ianthe made a frustrated sound. She didn't want to ask someone. With the added pressure of the first day at the school, she would probably die before getting two words out.

 

She looked around, and noticed a woman in a maid's garb. Maids? Are we going to have maids? Two other kids were standing around her, and one of them was asking her something. Maybe they're lost, too. Ianthe walked up to the group, hoping that they would ask some of the things she wanted to know.

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((It'll be everyone in the roleplay in one class. That way we won't be confused with who's in who's class when everyone is in one whole class. I'll think of a schedule for the day.))

 

Rachel looked at the castle in front of her with some clothes and some belongings in her hands. She put on her pin on where her heart is and walked inside the huge castle with her worn shoes on for once. "Me, a princess. Well that will be an adventure." She looked to her right to see a couple of kids near a maid. "Well hello there kids. I'm Ms.Conebon. What can I help you with?", the maid said in a friendly tone. Rachel walked up to her, interested in what they were talking about. "You kids look very nice today actually."

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((I mean this to you in no offense Pi but please, don't Nazi me. I get it if I do something really outrageous but other than that, respect my wishes. I am roleplaying to enjoy myself not to be critisized and to have my mistakes exploited. I get enough of that at home.))

 

-Marie felt crowded but she knew it would be rude to leave at this point. Her voice was a little less confident and a lot more shy by the next time she spoke.- "I, that is, I was hoping you could tell me where I can.." She glanced sheepishly at the other students, failing to notice the similar dove pins adorned on their clothing. "...find my class schedule for the semester." Marie finished lamely, desperately wanting to shrink to the size of a mouse. In the corner of her eye she spotted a small grey body with a twitching pink nose pointed up at her. The small thing squeaked barely audible and Marie smiled and then caught herself, looking back to the maid and pretending she didn't see it. She felt a little better now, though.-

 

 

((edited out indication of powers))

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((Okay, but three things: First, the point of criticism is to help people improve. It is not "exploiting" your mistakes. People learn through being wrong, after all. Second, the use of "no offense" tends to offend me more than most things people can say. "Stuff stuff stuff...wait, that stuff might offend someone! I'll just tack this 'no offense' onto the beginning of it and that totally makes it all better." Third, the dove children don't know about their powers yet. Read the first post.))

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((I under stand what you mean but I wasn't referring to others, I was just saying how it made me feel. Second, I'm sorry, I really was sincere in that I didn't want to offend you, honest. Since I was only sharing my own personal opinion and not speaking on behalf of others. To others you may very well be helpful and I'm glad. I myself just don't like it but I didn't want to offend you in any way while expressing that. Lastly, I know they don't know about it but, being able to understand animals is something you notice right off the bat, I mean, it's kind of hard not to notice. I'll PM Peach and ask her about it to verify.))

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((Nah, don't apologize. It's a personal berserk button, and I just wanted to let you know so you won't keep pressing it. I think it's mostly because I automatically assume people aren't trying to offend unless it's incredibly obvious, so people who deliberately state that sound a bit snobby to me. You also pulled that "at home" card, which is really not much of a reason but is used bunches anyway, so I kind of quietly lost my temper there. Criticizing still has nothing to do with exploiting, though. You coulda just said that you don't like it OKAY SHUTTING UP NOW.))

 

Another girl was approaching the slowly growing group. Ianthe stepped to the side to let her through. That was when she noticed the pin.

 

A dove, just about to take flight. Ianthe gave a little gasp. She checked her pin, and confirmed that they were exactly the same. She doubted two identical pins could have come from different places. So if hers was found with her near the river, then what about this other girl? Ianthe quickly looked around, took off the pin and stuffed it in her bag. There were too many people here. She would have to ask the girl about it later.

 

Ianthe returned to the conversation. The girl asking questions seemed to shrink as she spoke. Ianthe smiled behind her bag, reminded of herself. This was perfect - just the question she was going to ask. She leaned in, waiting for the answer.

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