Posted March 4, 2012 (edited) OCC Thread. Short History (Dove children) You were born, or rather, found actually, flowing down a river in a basket with ten other newborn babies flowing with you. No one knows where you came from, nor who your parents were. Luckily, some adults were near the river and found a home for all of you. When your new parents lifted you up from the basket, they found a pin, a pin with a dove that looked like it was about to take off. On the back was engraved a child's name, your name to be exact, and so your journey begins. As you were growing up, you had one main interest (your power is based off of this), your parents tried, and tried, and tried to persuade you to get interested in something else. But you never could change your interest and your parents threw in the towel and decided to live with it. (Everyone's) When you were seven, news came around saying about a group of people who were training village 11-13 year old boys and girls to become princes/princesses. Your parents saw a glimmer of hope in you that you would've been worthy, and that when you were older, you would be sent there. Plots Dove children plot Now, 12 years after you were found, your parents sent you to school, a school that teaches you the do's and don't's of becoming a prince/princess. As you walk in the building, you turn around and wave back to your parents, then enter in the castle gates. You are one of the "Dove children", one of the eleven children who was found in the river at birth. As you were growing up you had one main interest. You are trying to graduate from the school to in hopes to become a prince/princess someday. The teachers that are supposed to be "helping you" are actually very mean and will hit you if you make one mistake. The only people that are kind to them is King Matt, Prince Martyn, and Future Princess Gertrude. You soon befriend not only the "Dove children", but also the other students. In the future, something surprising will happen, and it will require everyone to save the day. Student plot You live in the same little village as the "Dove children" and your parents send you to royal school. You didn't want to go to royal school but you decide to go anyways because your parents wanted you to. The teachers still treat you like a slave owner to slaves, (not trying to offend anyone) while King Matt, Prince Martyn, and Future Princess Gertrude treat you like loving parents to their children. At first you aren't sure if you should befriend the "Dove Children" then you see that they are just like you. You soon befriend the "Dove children" and you save the day with them in the future. Main info You get sent there when the school needs more students, which is usually once every year. At the end of the year there will be a holiday dance that invites royal families from surrounding kingdoms to put their knowledge to the test. Many are being trained because somehow, many kings, queens, princes, and princesses are getting kidnapped. (*hint hint* *Wink wink*) If you fail, you get sent back to your hometown or if you're lucky, get sent to work at a neighboring castle. This school was created so that there could be Princes/Princesses in place for dead kings and queens with no one to replace them with. Since it's usually village children that are learning, they have to teach them reading, math, history, and manners. If you make a mistake, the teachers don't take it lightly, and will put them in the dark basement, hitting them, not letting them have any free time on the lawns, and not letting them eat. Setting, time, and schedule Main setting: At the royal school, which is actually the royal castle. Rooms in the castle: Bedroom- A room with lots of beds, this is where everyone where sleep. Dining room- A room with a very long table. At the very ends are thrones for the King and Queen. The chairs near the thrones is where the Princes and Princesses sit, then the staff, and lastly, the children. You can talk to other children at this time, and one of two of the only times you can talk to each other unless said otherwise. Classroom A, B, and C- The classrooms where the children are taught. Manners is Classroom B, Reading and Math is classroom A, and History is Classroom C. Basement- A room where everything is stored. If you are bad you get sent down here, and it's a place where you really don't want to go to. It's dark, dust bunny infested, and cobwebs are everywhere. Castle grounds- The front and back lawn of the castle. Once a day the teachers let the class play on the grounds. This is the only time you can really socialize and play. This is the other only time you can talk to each other. Throne room- A room where all the thrones are. This is where the Holiday dances are taken place as well. Time: The role play is taken place in Medieval times, and somewhere in Great Britain. The role play will start in the morning at the castle gates with all the other children. Schedule: 1.Breakfast 2.Ms.Fansand's English and Math class 3.Ms.Hatford's Manners class 4.Lunch 5.Outdoor Time 6.Mr.Dawntown's History class 7.Dinner Maps Thank you Thegreenrobby for the maps! Map Map two Staff and Royal members Teachers: Ms.Hatford- Teaches Manners Ms.Fansand- Teaches English and Math Mr.Dawntown- Teaches History Staff: Mrs.Greatson- Chef Mr.Greydown- Gardener Ms.Conebon- Maid Royal Members: King: King Matt Queen: Queen Rose (Dead) Prince/s: Prince Toby and his brother Prince Martyn Princess/es: Princess Sandi Future Princes/Princesses: Future Princess Gertrude Rules 1. No swearing or romance between anyone, period. The children are only 11-13 ok? 2. Thoughts should be used in Italics, speak "should be with quotation marks", and OOC chat (should be in marks like this), [this], or ((this)). 3. No Gary-Sues/Mary-Sues or anti Gary-Sues/Mary-Sues 4. No violence between characters, there is no reason to and plus, you will need the rest of the role players for they need each other in the future. 5. Character sheets shall be posted in the OOC 6. Follow DC rules and Role play rules 7. Be nice to each other please 8. Only human, nothing else when creation of your character 9. One "Dove Child" per role player except for Chasilin, Thegreenrobby, and Evangeline5432 10. I shall control all the npcs. If I can't do it I'll have some of the role players play as them if they want to. 11. Put "Dove pins are epic" in your other section in your character sheet if you read everything. 12. Have Fun!!!!!! Character sheet/s "Dove Children" Character sheet: Username: Character name: Gender: Looks: Power: Likes: Dislikes: Personality: Past Life: Other: Student Character Sheet: Username: Character Name: Age: (Between 11-13) Gender: Looks: Likes: Dislikes: Personality: Past Life: Other: Information you might want to know The "Dove children" have one special ability that no one know about besides themselves, which is a special power. You can choose what the power is. Also, they can talk to each other through their pins as long as they have it nearby or wear it. It's sorta like a hand radio, but only the Dove children can hear it. And they don't know about talking through their hand radio (or their power) until they meet the other Dove children. A strange voice in their head will tell them their power and that they can speak to each other via pin once all the Dove children meet each other. Prince Toby and Prince Martyn are King Matt's and Queen Rose's two twin sons, although they aren't identical twins, because Prince Toby has his father's brown hair, and Prince Martyn has his mother's Blonde hair. Princess Sandi and Future Princess Gertrude are again, twins that aren't identical, but not by much Like Prince Toby and Prince Martyn. Princess Sandi has light brown hair, while Future Princess Gertrude has dark brown hair. Princess Sandi is married to Prince Toby, and they don't have an interest for the children. And they barely even talk to the children. On the other hand, Prince Martyn proposed to Future Princess Gertrude a few months ago. They both have an interest to the children and sometimes drop in the classrooms to check on the children, and when they view how the class is doing, the teachers pretend to be nice to the children, and is the only time they ever be nice to the children besides letting them go outside for a while. Prince Martyn and his future bride also have a special interest to the "Dove children". Dove children, Students, character sheets Dove children 1. Rachel- PeachSapling 2. Robert (Robby)- Thegreenrobby 3. Ianthe- Fractional Pi Day 4. Marie- Chasilin 5. Angel- Silver_Voices 6. Adriana- Evangeline5432 7. Sawyer- Shadow_Claw 8. Jax- WinterWhisperz 9. Micah- Chasilin 10. Elayna- Evangeline5432 11. Skyne- Thegreenrobby Students 1. Katniss- dangershy 2. Derek- Silver_Voices Character sheets Dove Children Username: PeachSapling Character name: Rachel Gender: Female Looks: She has dark brown, long hair that goes halfway between her waist and shoulder. She has on a tan dress that has some rips here and there. She also hates wearing shoes unless she has to. Power: She can make plants grow with a single touch of her finger. Likes: Plants, books (When she can read), kindness Dislikes: Fire, darkness, things that are mean Personality: Very kind to her friends/classmates, sometimes shy around other people, very curious about unknown things. Past Life: She lived a small house in the village with her 2 older brothers that always pick on her for being the only girl in the house because her new mother died when she was 3 years old. She has a special fond for planting things and has been planting since she was 4. Username: Thegreenrobby Character name: Robert (Robby) Morris Gender: Male Looks: about 5'5, Robby is generally tall for his age. His light blue eyes contrast his dark blonde (Almost brown) hair. He has a fair-sized scar on his knee caused by a childhood rough-housing accident, though he refuses to talk about it. Power: Telekenesis (Can lift objects of varying sizes, larger ones possible upon more practice) Likes: Goofing off, chatting with friends, designing/building machines or other devices. Dislikes: Cinnamon, Snooty people, waiting (For ANYTHING!) Personality: Robby is an intelligent child. He excels in both math and reading, however, he has little care for manners. This often can get him in trouble, and he has trouble making friends due to this. Otherwise, he is not a troublemaker. His intelligence often leads him to create. He takes pleasure in showing off his work, in whatever form it may be. Art, design, even his math work, he likes to show off. If he comes up with a new way to do something, you will hear about it. Robby is full of energy and easily excitable. He almost dances when he is anxious or excited. His quirkiness can be hard to get used to, and just about impossible to understand. However, he is a great and caring friend if you can get around it. Past Life: Robby was treated quite well as a small child. He always got his hands on the latest of technology of the day. You could say he was spoiled. Username: Fractional Pi Day Character name: Ianthe Gender: Female Looks: Mousy brown, shoulder-length hair and big grayish-brown eyes. A little short for her age. Power: Intangibility/phasing through solid objects Likes: Patterns, nature, drawing, problems that require thinking Dislikes: Loud people, people who are convinced that they are right about everything, sudden movements Personality: Ianthe is a little awkward when it comes to conversation. She often trips over her words or forgets to explain key things, and sometimes spaces out in the middle of a conversation before blurting out something completely unrelated. She’s a little shy around most people, and has trouble remembering the details of things she’s not interested in. A lot of the other kids think she’s a weird little girl. She doesn’t mind much, preferring to watch than to participate in activities anyway, but sometimes does get a little lonely. Past Life: She was adopted by a nice couple and has a younger brother and an older sister. None of the siblings really paid much attention to each other and preferred to talk to their own friends. She often went off on her own to explore just beyond the village when no one was paying attention. Username: Chasilin Character name: Evelynn-Marie Roy de Rives ((Marie)) Gender: Female Looks: She's not spectacularly beautiful or very hard on the eyes, she's very naturally pretty in her own way. She's got a heart shaped face frammed with cherrybrown hair cut back and flipped out until her shoulders where it falls straight and unlayered until her lower back. She has forest green eyes that are encircled in a blue-green ring of solid color. Marie is about 5'5" and has very long limbs, she's very skinny but her curves aren't lacking by much despite that. She's very much average in everything, appearance wise. She generally wears a soft brown sundress that comes off one shoulder and dips beneath the other, she wears leggings that are striped in an alteration between black and green and she wears brown boots that hike up her calves to just beneath her knee. On her arms she has brown cloth gloves that go up to just beneath her shoulder, there are no finger holes apart for the thumbs. She wears a golden necklace that had an emerald on the end encompassed by bronze vines which loop over the chain. Her earrings are simple emerald studs and she's got a matching ring on her right index finger. These articles of jewelry belonged to Elizah, who had gotten them passed down from generations of her family because her ancestor was a child born by an affair with a King thus the name 'Roy', and so the jewels were passed on to Marie; she never takes them off. Power: The ability to communicate to all living things including mute or deaf human beings or those that speak a different language. For such a socially inept person, her ability is quite confounding but since the deepest thing held in her heart is the want to communicate efficiently it became her power and it's quite a useful one. One of the creepy things though, is having the power to communicate beyond the corporeal realm, yep, ghosts. ((Will come in handy if anyone dies prematurely x3) Limit: There is no real limit apart from being unable to communicate to something that can not communicate in some form or another or if it is not some kind of life form. Likes: Animals, being immersed in nature, reading books about animals or basically anything she takes an interest to. She enjoys learning new ways to heal and tend to animals and ways to make them happy. She loves to wear brown, earthy colors or colors that are inconspicuous like tans and blacks. Dislikes: Arrogance, impatience (though she can be herself sometimes) hypocracy, animal abuse, nature abuse, animal extinction or the over abuse of food production. She also doesn't like being the center of attention or being touched by anything but animals and plants. Personality: She's quiet and to herself though she's got some unexpectedly strong points. She's unafraid to stand up for something she feels strongly for and she's honest to a fault; it gets her in trouble quite often. She's especially shy around people her own age but she can handle children and adults far better. She is terrible at taking the intiative and has to be asked/told/invited to do something before she does it. Otherwise she'll keep her personal wants to herself. She's not selfish openly but she has selfish thoughts, when she does, she mental beats herself for it. She does this whenever she thinks anything that's negative. Since she doesn't like to think about things and prefers to live in the moment than think about the past or the future she's often caught staring at nothing, lost in an empty void of absorbing what's around her. She could stay like this for hours and not a single thought will cross her mind. She prefers quiet places to loud noisy ones, she's claustrophobic but is good at working through crowds efficiently. She's a hard worker and a likes to keep things neat for a while before giving up and letting things be as they may. She's extremely contradictive. Past Life: She lived on a large farm surrounded by livestock who loved a good conversation during chore time. She was always eager to help on the farm and the lovely elderly couple who took care of her doted on her. They were a happy family but once Elizah passed away, Rodger was never the same...he soon passed away but not before naming her heir to his livings and sending her off to the school to learn to be a princess. She'd always been their princess and Elizah had dreamed of being able to send Marie there, but she passed away before then. Now, the ranch is manned by temp workers who live in it and keep it tended while she is away. Username: Silver_Voices Character name: Angel Gender: Female Looks: Image Long, blond hair and green eyes. Pretty short for a 12 year old, 4'7. She fashioned her dove pin into a hair piece, and she wears it every day. Power: Flame generation/control. Likes: She just loves fire, watching it and feeling it's warmth. It's the only thing that will calm her down. Dislikes: She hates the cold and water. Some people fear what's in the water, but she fears the water itself. She also hates being limited. If you give her a limit, she'll try everything she can to get past it, just because it's there. That's something that gets her into trouble a lot. Personality: She's a big bundle of fun crazy energy. She's always doing something, never once sitting still. Very outspoken and cheerful. She's naturally sweet and caring, but can be very fierce when angered. She'll fight for what she wants, and won't roll over and die until she gets it. Past Life: When she was taken in by her 'parents', they already had five children under their roof. She was practically raised by her 'siblings'. She, in turn, help raise her four younger siblings. She has nine siblings total, her being the tenth. The oldest is 23, and the youngest is not even a year old. Though she wasn't born into the large family, and she doesn't look anything like them, she is very much a part of it. In fact, they fight for her attention. Username: evangeline5432 Character name: Adriana Gender: Female Looks: Image Power: Dark Manipulation-The ability to take the darkness around her and manipulate it to her will. Sometimes it might be to effect a person or sometimes just to condense it and will it to take form. Likes: She likes to draw and spend her time alone thinking. Darkness. Dislikes: Loud people. Personality: She is quiet, very rarely talking. Smart but a tad rebellious. Patient but has a temper. Shy to those she doesn't know. Past Life: Fill in later Username: Shadow_claw Character name: Sawyer Gender: F Looks: She is tall and lean, but also muscular. Sawyer has long, dark brown hair, and very fair skin. Her eyes are a starting silver/ Power: Can turn into any animal. Likes: animals, nature, loves reading, sleeping in, sunset, sunrise, laughing, jokes, and playing games. Dislikes: poaching, hunting for sport, killing for no reason, bullies, cold nights, mean people, etc. . Personality: Sawyer has really no sense of pain(for most of the time). Sawyer normally takes things seriously. She is sarcastic and sometimes a bit snappy to people. Sawyer has a short fuse, and is very aggressive when animals are harmed. Past Life: Sawyer was adopted by an older man who lived in the woods, and raised there. He died just months ago, and she is alone, but willing to move on. Username:Chasilin Character name: Micah (no last name known but called Mystery Micah) Gender: Male Looks: Looks (The purple is Aubergine) Power: His power is extreme speed, he can move faster than one millionth of a second giving the illusion that he can become invisible. His natural reflexes are already top notch and he rarely uses his powers except for when absolutely necessary. He prefers to rely on his own strengths when ever possible but even he knows that sometimes it isn't enough. Limit: Moving too quickly for too long burns out his shoes far too quickly so he often goes barefooted and his body is accustomed to the immense speed. However, if he moves too quickly or in one space too long there is a fat chance he could damage his surroundings. Moving faster than one millionth of a second in a small area causes the air to heat up from the friction of molecules and can cause static electricity, this hurts him more than anything else due to the sword he often wields whenever using his power. Likes: Unknown Dislikes: Unknown but it's also a general feel you get from him that he's best left undisturbed and is hard to approach. Personality: Strong, silent type, mysterious and a loner with random acts of kindness revealing his personally honor code which he strictly abides by and a hidden side that spontaneously reveals itself when triggered by different things. Chivalrous and honor bound but ruthless and best left with his feathers unruffled. He hides his dove pin because it's extremely immaculate and gets extremely irritated just from the sight of it but even so he feels an odd attachment to it and has never gotten rid of it. Past Life: He has no recollection of his history, since he was the age of 6 he's lived and struggled to survive off of left overs and droppings from food wastes. He fought hard until he was 8 when life became easier. He was accepted into a poor foster care and he ate and lived there but he slept outside on the roof most times and practiced sword fighting having seen it once between two men in a town once in passing. When he came to be close to 15 the man, husband to the foster care owner, gave him a real blade, it was a fine specimen and Micah has never let it leave his side since the old man passed away from a robbery gone wrong. He has incredible reflexes and is a truly deadly force, he moves gracefully and it only seems to enhance how frightening he can be but he's about as smart book-wise as a tree stump. He's got common sense and street smarts but little more than that and he has little interest in becoming a prince but was sent off to learn manners and properly study since he'd become even more recluse since the old man died and the foster woman couldn't bear it anymore. Username: Thegreenrobby Character name: Skyne Nopree Gender: Male Looks: Very tall for his age, about 5'6. His eyes are a low green, with a hint of hazel. His hair is reddish, with streaks of brown. Power: Can reverse time, but only minor events. Only he will remember reversing time, unless he touches someone when he activates that power. The longer he spends using this power, rewinding, the more ill effects come upon him. <5 seconds: No effect. 5-15 seconds: Coughs, last about a minute. 15-20 seconds: Stomach cramps. 20-30 seconds: That... vomity feeling, will likely actually vomit. Hair starts to turn grey. 30+: Fatal effects. May actually die. Using this power multiple times in a row may also stack the time. Likes: All things fair, sweet foods. Dislikes: Dis-advantages, vegetables that aren't corn. Personality: Skyne is a 'Stickler,' so to speak. He is always the one to follow the rules. He is a joke-cracker, and likes to poke fun at various things. He smiles a lot. Past Life: His parents raised him like any other generic child. They taught him one simple guideline to life: "Follow the rules of your leaders, but have fun when there are none." He knows nothing of the Dove Pin setstory. Username: WinterWhisperz Character name: Jaxon, but goes by Jax Gender: Male Looks: Short shaggy dark brown hair and blazing blue eyes, slightly muscular build, has a strap of leather wrapped around his wrist that he carrys the dove pin on, has oddly cool skin Power: hydrokinesis Limit: he doesn't know he has an ability yet, figured any strange happenings would have just been part of the unpredictable nature of water, but after these strange events, he ends up very fatigued, this will probably lessen as he gets better, but he doesn't understand how unlimited water is, and therefore limits himself. Likes: Swimming, people, drawing, animals, nature, being around water and being cold, loves stormy weather Dislikes: Not getting what he wants, school, boring people (teachers) Personality: A wild card, loves being around people and being the center of attention, not really bothered by much, just wants to have a good time, but is a good guy deep down, and is suprizingly responsable when he wants to be Past Life: Taken from the river by a relatively young couple, who was very open with him about where he came from. They were the 'parents' that were friends and he was their 'practice child, and he prepared them for their other children that came afew years after he was taken in. A boy and a girl, and the girl hated Jax. She made sure he knew it too, and tho they never admitted it, their parents favored their daughter, and Jax would end up in trouble for the things the girl would do, so Jax started sneeking out, often accompanied by his brother, to the very river Jax was pulled from, theyd spend hours playing there, and it became the place to be. It wasnt soon after that his foster parents learned of this school for princes and princesses, there was no doubt in their mind that he was going as much as he hated the thought. Username: Evangeline5432 Character name: Elayna Whalen Gender: Female Looks: With white hair Power: Light Manipulation: Can absorb the light energy around her and manipulate. This usually results in healing herself or someone. Or even manipulating it into a solid object. Limit: Absorbing too much energy or using her ability will result in a nosebleed or worse. She can not absorb energy for long otherwise it would kill her. Likes: Would be RP'd Dislikes: Silence Personality: Is talkative Past Life: Will be RP'd Other: Unknowingly Adriana's twin. Students Username: dangershy Character Name: Katniss Kaidy Age: 12 Gender: Female Looks: Tall, about five foot seven. She has reddish-brown hair that drops down to her waist, usually in a braid. She is most commonly seen in a very simple outfit, usually a nice tee-shirt and some pants, since she doesn't really like being all fancied-up. Her skin is a light tan shade and her eyes are a shining and truthful shade of blue, almost teal colored. Likes: Being alone, quiet places, books, writing, drawing. Dislikes: Being in noisy places, people who are mean, (like the teachers tongue.gif) tall people. Personality: She has a very mild temper and hardly ever gets angry, and when she is angry, she has no idea what to do with it, usually taking out something to squeeze that won't shatter into a million pieces. She is also a very caring person who will do anything for the people who can befriend her. Past Life: Sort of like her personality; she basically stayed in her room and avoided people, and when she went outside people would see her as weird and she'd be cast out of any games. She has led a quiet life of loneliness, basically. Other: She's extremely claustrophobic, arachnephobic, batophobic, and astraphobic. (Fear of enclosed spaces, fear of spiders, fear of heights, and fear of thunder and lightning.) Username: Silver_Voices Character Name: Derek Age: 13 Gender: Male Looks: Image Longish, brown hair, usually unkept and messy. Large brown eyes. 5'2. Likes: Derek likes practical things. He likes to keep things plain and not too intricate. Also, thinking things through and analizing situations. He likes to try to figure out what will happen next. Dislikes: When something happens that he doesn't expect. He hates it when he's wrong. Personality: Derek is the level headed type, the one who keeps everything calm and organized. He looks at the situation, analizes it, then acts. Past Life: Derek was only one when his family took in Angel. He played with her a lot growing up. They are the closest in age of all their siblings. They grew up together and got into all sorts of mischief, and Angel's natural cuteness usually got them out of trouble. Though, sometimes things got out of hand when Angel brought in her love of fire. After a close encounter with a house fire they almost caused, Derek finally matured and grew up. He laughs at Angel's antics, but never participates, and also advises her on what is going 'too far'. Because they were so close, Angel made a crude replica of her dove pin and gave it to him. He keeps it on the arm strap of his bag. Edited May 1, 2012 by PeachSapling Share this post Link to post
Posted March 6, 2012 (edited) Hello. Please note that I am going to critique your RP. However, I am not an official approver, nor am I a moderator. (Actually, I have an RP I made shortly after yours, and I hope an approver sees it, too.) Your grammar was great; it certainly was a lot better than several of the RP's I've seen. I, however, have not gone through it with a fine-tooth comb like the approvers normally do. There may be minor errors I did not recognize. I loved your description of the setting. However, visual memory is greater than factual memory. In other words, it will be easier to understand the setting if you draw a map. If you want me to, I may be able to provide one (I lately found I have a fairly good understanding of Microsoft Paint.) However, this map may be based on my understanding of the setting, and may vary differently from what you expected it to be, so I still suggest you make your own (Or describe the scene in great detail), or the map may not turn out as you envisioned. This is certainly a unique plot. I certainly would join it when it gets approved. (Can you PM me when it does?) However, there is one specific part of the plot that I do not fully understand. This is the special abilities of the Dove children. Do the users get to choose these abilities, or do you provide them? Do the children know about them from birth, or do they figure them out later on? There is also the Pins, themselves. Just how does one communicate through them? Is it telepathic? Or more like a hand radio? This particular fractions of the whole needs more to back it up. If you don't write this down on the OP, people will certainly ask questions later or go against how you want it. This is, however, the only flaw I can really see in your RP. All in all, this is a very great RP, and I hope that it gets approved soon. -Robby P.S. 1. No swearing or romance, period. The children are only 11-13 ok? This made me laugh out loud; it is the exact opposite of how many children are today. Edited March 6, 2012 by thegreenrobby Share this post Link to post
Posted March 6, 2012 (edited) I'm actually very shocked you said this had great grammar . I was actually not accepted into a role play once because my grammar wasn't good. I think it's because I read the pinned topics about making a good starting role play. As for the map, you may do it thegreenrobby. My only request is that you have the classrooms close together. I'm glad you offered. As for the Dove pins, here is what I put in, the "Dove children" have one special ability that no one know about besides themselves, which is a special power. You can choose what the power is. Also, they can talk to each other through their pins as long as they have it nearby or wear it. It's kinda like a hand radio, but only the Dove children can hear it. And they don't know about it until they meet the other Dove children. A strange voice in their head will tell them their power once all the Dove children meet each other. And, I put in "power" in the "Dove children" sheet. I have decided that I will add students so that other people can join. I shall put when I have made the changes. Edit: I have added in the changes for students. I shall copy and paste what I changed for you to see. Student plot You live in the same little village as the "Dove children" and your parents send you to royal school. The teachers still treat you like a slave owner to slaves, (not trying to offend anyone) while King Matt, Prince Martyn, and Future Princess Gertrude treat you like loving parents to their children. You soon befriend the "Dove children" and you save the day with them. (Rule) 8. 1 "Dove Child" per role player. There is only 11 "Dove children" and only 10 slots for other role players because I will be a "Dove child" as well. If you don't get a spot for a "Dove child" you can become a student. Edited March 6, 2012 by PeachSapling Share this post Link to post
Posted March 7, 2012 Okay. I'm working on the map as I write this. Just one thing, though: do you want there to be separate bedrooms for the boys and girls? I'm going to put them as one for now, but let me know if you want me to change it. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 7, 2012 Nah, I planned it to be one bedroom for the boys and girls actually. For your hard work you get a cookie. *gives cookie to Thegreenrobby* Share this post Link to post
Posted March 9, 2012 Did an approver get a chance to see this? This is a great RP, and I really want to join it. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 9, 2012 (edited) I don't think a single approver saw this. :/ I'll cross my fingers that one will. I'll change the message under the title to help get one here. Edit: I added a poll! Edited March 9, 2012 by PeachSapling Share this post Link to post
Posted March 9, 2012 Your RP has only been up for 5 days. Please have some patience in waiting for an approver - they have lives, just like you. :3 http://forums.dragcave.net/index.php?showt...dpost&p=3332753 Do not send a Personal Message (PM) to an approver, unless they have otherwise stated that they would accept them. They will get to your roleplay in due time, you need to be patient. Approvers have lives too and there are a whole bunch of RPs out there. In saying this, if your roleplay has been sitting there for a week since last an approver checked or if it hasn’t been assessed at all in two weeks, you may PM one of us. While you're waiting, I suggest expanding upon your plot. It's very short and there's a lot about this RP you could give some more detail on, like explaining what the school is, what is learned in it, how people are mean, why the community exists/is together, etc. Also, would you mind linking the map? It stretches the page. ^^ Share this post Link to post
Posted March 9, 2012 Thank you Sock puppet, sorry if I was impatient, *face palm* I'm usually more patient than that. *remembers* Don't panic until 1-2 weeks pass. Then panic. (Not the panic part ) Anyways, about your questions, I shall answer them! The school is a school that teaches children how to become Princes/ Princesses. Once the school is finished, the boys and girls get sent to other kingdoms that need Princes and Princesses. (Like if the King and Queen are dead, they get sent there.) Since the children don't go to school and just work in the village in their past life, they have to learn who to read, math, history, and of course, manners. The teachers will punish them by putting them in the dark basement, hitting them, not letting them have any free time on the lawns, and not letting them eat. I dunno about your last one though. *Scratches head* Any other ideas? As for the pictures, I shall try to put them in links. Thank U for looking Sock. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 10, 2012 I voted in your poll. Now I am craving chocolate chip cookies... Also, what still needs to be done to get this approved? I'd like to help in any way possiblr. That is, if you need any. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 10, 2012 (edited) I'm now accepting via Pm. I added a new section for all the characters/character sheets. So don't be surprised if it looks longer, for it is longer. Edit: The forms are now in codes. -PeachSapling Edited March 10, 2012 by PeachSapling Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 I sent a PM. I did have a few questions about it, though. You should also add a "Physical Appearance" section, as it would cause the RP'ers to assume that the other players look like whatever that person prefers. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 I voted in your poll. Now I am craving chocolate chip cookies... Also, what still needs to be done to get this approved? I'd like to help in any way possiblr. That is, if you need any. Critiquing or not posting. When threads get lots of posts, it's hard to tell whether an RP has received critique or is waiting for more or is waiting for the OP to fix the mistakes or what. ~ How do you become a prince or princess? What does it entail? Why are so many being trained to become royalty? How does one get accepted into the school? What happens if you fail? Can you give any more info on the surprising event or is that meant to be a secret until it happens? Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 (edited) Hello, Peach - I'm gistofeverything, and I'm one of those magical people that can bring this roleplay towards Approval~ *yay!* When your new parents lifted you up from the basket, they found a pin, a pin with a dove looking like it was about to take off. Since you are in your History, you need to be in past tense. Looking should be had looked. Now, 12 years after you were found, your parents sent you to school, a school that teaches you the do's and don't's of becoming a prince/princess. As you walk in the building, you turn around and wave back to your parents, then enter in the castle gates. This sentence should be in your Dove Children plot, since there is a time change, and the present isn't History, is it? While I'm here, I must ask for at least two (2) sentences to be added to each part of your story, please. Edited March 11, 2012 by gistofeverything Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 I did mostly everything you told me to do, I just have some questions. Where do you want me to add 2 sentences? I don't have a story, do you mean the History or the Plots? Or is it both? What does entail mean? I've never heard/seen it before and I don't understand the meaning it gave to me when I looked it up. (I'm not even in middle school yet, so that might be why.) Also, about the future secret event, *cough* Important day *cough* Lots of unknown kidnapping *cough* Medieval times *cough* Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 Add at least two sentences to each Plot, and the History. The best I can explain "entail" is to cause to happen. "Happiness usually entails hard work." Like that. And you're in elementary school?! This is a pretty good RP for someone that young... Share this post Link to post
Posted March 11, 2012 I've added 2 sentences in History, and plots. As for the "entail" part I think I answered that in the "Main Info" Section. Or wait, did I? And yes, I am in elementary school. I'll be going to middle school next year. So, I'm not far off from going to middle school. Any other things this needs? (I'm guessing there needs to be more information.) Share this post Link to post
Posted March 12, 2012 Yayz! I is approved! ((Wait. How does the day go? Which classes go in which order, and when?)) Share this post Link to post
Posted March 12, 2012 Make sure that you spell out numbers lower than ten. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 12, 2012 Make sure that you spell out numbers lower than ten. I was taught eleven, not ten, because eleven can look like two l's. Oh well. Short History (Dove children) You were born, or rather, found actually, flowing down a river in a basket with TEN other newborn babies flowing with you. No one knows where you came from, nor who your parents were. Luckily, some adults were near the river and found a home for all of you. When your new parents lifted you up from the basket, they found a pin, a pin with a dove that looked like it was about to take off. On the back was engraved a child's name, your name to be exact, and so your journey begins. As you were growing up, you had one main interest (your power is based off of this), your parents tried, and tried, and tried to persuade you to get interested in something else. But you never could change your interest and your parents threw in the towel and decided to live with it. (Everyone's) When you were SEVEN, news came around saying about a group of people who were training village 11-13 year old boys and girls to become princes/princesses. Your parents saw a glimmer of hope in you that you would've been worthy, and that when you were older, you would be sent there. Plots Dove children plot Now, 12 years after you were found, your parents sent you to school, a school that teaches you the do's and don't's of becoming a prince/princess. As you walk in the building, you turn around and wave back to your parents, then enter in the castle gates. You are one of the "Dove children", one of the ELEVEN children who was found in the river at birth. As you were growing up you had ONE main interest. (This is what your power is based off of.) You are trying to graduate from the school to in hopes to become a prince/princess someday. The teachers that are supposed to be "helping you" are actually very mean and will hit you if you make one mistake. The only people that are kind to them is King Matt, Prince Martyn, and Future Princess Gertrude. You soon befriend not only the "Dove children", but also the other students. In the future, something surprising will happen, and it will require everyone to save the day. Student plot You live in the same little village as the "Dove children" and your parents send you to royal school. You didn't want to go to royal school but you decide to go anyways because your parents wanted you to. The teachers still treat you like a slave owner to slaves, (not trying to offend anyone) while King Matt, Prince Martyn, and Future Princess Gertrude treat you like loving parents to their children. At first you aren't sure if you should befriend the "Dove Children" then you see that they are just like you. You soon befriend the "Dove children" and you save the day with them in the future. Main info You get sent there when the school needs more students, which is usually once every year. At the end of the year there will be a holiday dance that invites royal families from surrounding kingdoms to put their knowledge to the test. Many are being trained because somehow, many kings, queens, princes, and princesses are getting kidnapped. (*hint hint* *Wink wink*) If you fail, you get sent back to your hometown or if you're lucky, get sent to work at a neighboring castle. This school was created so that there could be Princes/Princesses in place for dead kings and queens with no one to replace them with. Since it's usually village children that are learning, they have to teach them reading, math, history, and manners. If you make a mistake, the teachers don't take it lightly, and will put them in the dark basement, hitting them, not letting them have any free time on the lawns, and not letting them eat. Setting and time Main setting: At the royal school, which is actually the royal castle. Rooms in the castle: Bedroom- A room with lots of beds, this is where everyone where sleep. Dining room- A room with a very long table. At the very ends are thrones for the King and Queen. The chairs near the thrones is where the Princes and Princesses sit, then the staff, and lastly, the children. You can talk to other children at this time, and one of two of the only times you can talk to each other unless said otherwise. Classroom A, B, and C- The classrooms where the children are taught. Manners is Classroom A, Reading and Math is classroom B, and History is Classroom C. Basement- A room where everything is stored. If you are bad you get sent down here, and it's a place where you really don't want to go to. It's dark, dust bunny infested, and cobwebs are everywhere. Castle grounds- The front and back lawn of the castle. Once a day the teachers let the class play on the grounds. This is the only time you can really socialize and play. This is the other only time you can talk to each other. Throne room- A room where all the thrones are. This is where the Holiday dances are taken place as well. Time: The role play is taken place in Medieval times, and somewhere in Great Britain. The role play will start in the morning at the castle gates with all the other children. Maps Thank you Thegreenrobby for the maps! Map Map 2 Staff and Royal members Teachers: Ms.Hatford- Teaches Manners Ms.Fansand- Teaches English and Math Mr.Dawntown- Teaches History Staff: Mrs.Greatson- Chef Mr.Greydown- Gardener Ms.Conebon- Maid Royal Members: King: King Matt Queen: Queen Rose (Dead) Prince/s: Prince Toby and his brother Prince Martyn Princess/es: Princess Sandi Future Princes/Princesses: Future Princess Gertrude Rules 1. No swearing or romance, period. The children are only 11-13 ok? 2. Thoughts should be used in Italics, speak "should be with quotation marks", and OOC chat (should be in marks like this), [this], or ((this)). 3. No violence between characters, there is no reason to and plus, you will need the rest of the role players for they need each other in the future. 4. Character sheets shall be posted in the thread when approved 5. Follow DC rules and Role play rules 6. Be nice to each other please 7. Only human, nothing else when creation of your character 8. ONE "Dove Child" per role player. There ARE only ELEVEN "Dove children" and only TEN slots for other role players because I will be a "Dove child" as well. If you don't get a spot for a "Dove child" you can become a student. 9. I shall control all the npcs. If I can't do it I'll have some of the role players play as them if they want to. 10. Put "Dove pins are epic" in your other section in your character sheet if you read everything. 11. Have Fun!!!!!! Character sheet/s (I'm accepting! PM me the forms.) CODE "Dove Children" Character sheet: Username: Character name: Gender: Looks: Power: Likes: Dislikes: Personality: Past Life: Other: CODE Student Character Sheet: Username: Character Name: Age: (Between 11-13) Gender: Looks: Likes: Dislikes: Personality: Past Life: Other: Information you might want to know The "Dove children" have one special ability that no one know about besides themselves, which is a special power. You can choose what the power is. Also, they can talk to each other through their pins as long as they have it nearby or wear it. It's sorta like a hand radio, but only the Dove children can hear it. And they don't know about it until they meet the other Dove children. A strange voice in their head will tell them their power once all the Dove children meet each other. Prince Toby and Prince Martyn are King Matt's and Queen Rose's TWO twin sons, although they aren't identical twins, because Prince Toby has his father's brown hair, and Prince Martyn has his mother's Blonde hair. Princess Sandi and Future Princess Gertrude are again, twins that aren't identical, but not by much Like Prince Toby and Prince Martyn. Princess Sandi has light brown hair, while Future Princess Gertrude has dark brown hair. Princess Sandi is married to Prince Toby, and they don't have an interest for the children. And they barely even talk to the children. On the other hand, Prince Martyn proposed to Future Princess Gertrude a few months ago. They both have an interest to the children and sometimes drop in the classrooms to check on the children, and when they view how the class is doing, the teachers pretend to be nice to the children, and is the only time they ever be nice to the children besides letting them go outside for a while. Prince Martyn and his future bride also have a special interest to the "Dove children". I picked them out as well as a grammar error or two. Change them, or suffer my green rath! *Mad cackle* Share this post Link to post
Posted March 13, 2012 Edited. Anything else? I have yet to notice anything else. I suggest you drag an approver over here. By the ear, preferably. Share this post Link to post
Posted March 13, 2012 *is dragged by the ear* (This is what your power is based off of.) You repeat this twice. Don't. Fix that, and I'll Approve... *rubs my sore ear...* Share this post Link to post
Posted March 13, 2012 You repeat this twice. Don't. *Points out specific areas and examples* As you were growing up, you had one main interest (your power is based off of this) (Short History - Dove Children - 2nd paragraph) Sounds a lot like: As you were growing up you had ONE main interest. (This is what your power is based off of.) (Plots - Dove Children - 2nd paragraph) *Offers ear cream to Gist* Share this post Link to post
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